I have been wondering about a question I have had for a while. In one the outtakes (Annobeunna's Tale) Drochondeur is mentioned as Lord Annobeunna Master of the Household. In that outtake Annobeunna was going to give him to the High King as a gift, but Vieliessar refused. In chapter 15 (The Hero's Tale) in Crown of Vengeance, Drochondeur was mentioned as Master of the Household for Vieliessar. A lot that was implied more then stated, but I was wondering how that changed?
I can not say the exact page, because the Nook version page, does not match the Hardback. It was really one sentence in the scene before the skirmish with Inglethendragir.
1. How long did it take you to develop your voice and style? And how can I as a writer develop mine? 2. Also, do you plan your book ahead of time using a certain story structure, or do you just set your fingers in gear and just fly?
I checked through the uncut manuscript, and I didn't find anything either. I suspect I'm missing a scene where Annobeunna consults her steward, who then goes to Vieliessar's household of his own free will.
I'm not sure how much of the following made it into the book. I regretted cutting it...
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The end of the day's march came with a strange abruptness. It was only when Annobeunna saw the ranks of komen before her narrow and re-form that she realized the wagons ahead of them were gone. Then most of the remaining komen spurred their mounts forward, and as they wheeled left and right, she could see the bones of the High King's encampment already laid out.
"Rithdeliel...?" Lord Vieliessar said, speaking her first words in many candlemarks.
"I know not," he answered, as if a true question had been asked.
"But they will know at the horselines," the silver-masked woman said. Her name, Annobeunna knew now, was Eletehradan, and she was, as she appeared, a mercenary—though she must be a former mercenary, as Lord Vieliessar required fealty of all who rode with her. "Come, my lord. We shall discover where your pavilions are set."
It was relief to give Eingall into the hands of the Keindostibaent ostler who had tended him since the day he was foaled, and quiet comfort to stand in encampment streets and see Keindostibaent's pavilions set as they had been ever since she could remember. It was satisfaction to send Drochondeur, Master of her Household, to say to Dathoreth Lightbrother's servant that he must find some other place to set his master's pavilion, for he was no longer welcome in her presence. And it was pleasure beyond naming to enter her own pavilion, to be greeted by her own servants and to have her Arming Page assist her in removing her armor as wine was warmed for her to drink and camp robes were presented for her approval by her Mistress of Chambers. She recalled that she was to dine with the High King this night, and so ordered her gown and jewels brought instead, and a bath prepared. She did not have the finery she might have commanded at Keindostibaent Great Keep—that loss was bitter—but she would do her best to show her new liege-lord proper respect.
"Here you are, my lord," Mistress Drianneredil said, hurrying back into the pavilion followed by several servants carrying chests. "It was fortunate indeed that you sent me for them when you did. There is not a household servant in the whole of the army save yours—and Landbond think nothing breaks," she finished with an irritated huff.
Annobeunna beckoned her over. Drianneredil gestured to the servants with her to carry the chests into the sleeping area, and tugged at the arm of the last so he would set the chest near Annobeunna's feet. Annobeunna pressed her palm into the silver oval on the chest's lid and heard it click as the spell unlocked. Dathoreth had set the locking spells on all her chests, she remembered—well, she would give another of her Lightborn his post and have the spells redone.
"No servants? Where are they?" she asked, as Drianneredil lifted out the first jewel case for her consideration. The High King's colors were green and silver; she wondered what she owned that was green. Keindostibaent's colors were sable and blue, so most of her jewels were blue as well.
"They are dead, my lady," Drianneredil said, managing to sound both shocked and surprised. "Lord Vieliessar's wagons were taken, and all who were not on the field were taken with them. The High House lords slew many."
"That is against the Codes of War!" Annobeunna exclaimed.
"Oh but no one follows the Codes of War now, Mother. Not the Twelve—and certainly not the High King." Princess Sangochon stepped through the doorway of the pavilion, still wearing her armor.
"Don't hover," Annobeunna said irritably. "Adanbern, see to Princess Sangochon's armor—I don't suppose you know where your Arming Page is?" she added.
"I don't even know where my pavilion is," Sangochon said. "Or when—if! —it will manage to appear. Perhaps we are all expected to sleep in the mud."
"Don't be ridiculous, darling, the ground froze solid moonturns ago," Annobeunna said automatically. "Oh yes, yes, those, fine," she said to Drianneredil, waving the case of blue-green gems away. Pirozaduta—called the "sky stone"—were the closest thing to green she suspected she had among her jewels, and Drianneredil would dawdle all night over dressing her if Annobeunna allowed it. "Where are your brothers?" she added, and Sangochon shrugged sweepingly.
"The Alliance slew the households of all who ride with the High King," Drochondeur said. "All," he repeated with a strange emphasis, and Annobeunna turned her head to look at him. Drianneredil had moved behind her to begin the task of undoing her elaborate war braid; she clucked her tongue, knowing it was beneath Annobeunna's princely dignity to notice.
If the very Landbonds of the domains which have sworn to Lord Vieliessar are here, would she have left the children of her lords behind? "They would not make war on children!" she said in horror.
"None who escaped saw children slain," Drochondeur answered with careful precision.
But a youth who had leaped the fire, or a maiden who had flown her kite three seasons before, was permitted to act as a Page of Battle, and under the Codes of War were not children: they must give parole if they were captured, nor would they be returned to their own lands unless their ransom was paid. Annobeunna closed her eyes at the horror of it. "Let that word be carried to the rest of the Thirty, and the Twelve will find no allies here," she said grimly.
"I fear for all of us under your protection, my lord," Drianneredil said mournfully (she had the knack of hearing nothing but that which affected her directly), "for we are surely at the mercy of this host of great princes who will seize us and bear us away."
"If they seized you, at least I wouldn't have to listen to you prattle," Sangochon said nastily.
"Worthy opponent," Annobeunna said crisply, for she would not rebuke a Princess of the Line Direct before her servants. "A komen's honor, whether prince or lord, lies in offering battle only to worthy opponents, for who will value a victory too easily gained?"
Sangochon set her jaw. "I suppose I should go see where 'Rovi is," she said grudgingly, as Adanbern drew out the pin that held the last piece of her armor in place.
"Put on a robe before you do," Annobeunna said. "I don't want you wandering the camp in your aketon as if you were a starving mercenary." She gestured toward her sleeping chamber, and Sangochon heaved a long-suffering sigh and trudged in that direction.
She returned a few moments later wrapping the sash tight on Annobeunna's favorite chamber-robe; deep blue velvet lined with soft black stonefox pelts. Annobeunna thought of telling Sangochon to return it undamaged, but such an admonition would probably only make her daughter find some mud to roll in, even if she had to order the Lightborn to conjure it first. And in truth, after the news she had just received, even the destruction of a favorite robe seemed less important than it would have on another day.
"Discover what you can of what transpired while the Twelve held the High King's people," Annobeunna said once Sangochon had left. There were a dozen servants in her pavilion, but she spoke for Drochondeur's ears. "If any saw all of what happened, I wish to speak to them."
"T't," Drianneredil said, giving Annobeunna's hair an unnecessary tug. "Surely such plotting and prying is work for such as Lord Vorcamion, not a mere servant."
"And if Lord Vorcamion was likely to gain the answers I want, I would ask him," Annobeunna said, stifling a sigh. Drianneredil gave herself fine airs—she had been born and raised at Court, though her mother had been Lightborn—while Master Drochondeur's family had merely served Annobeunna's family since the founding of Keindostibaent. They'd both been members of Annobeunna's household since before she became War Prince, and their rivalry was unceasing. She wondered if it would matter any longer. "I am sure you have pinned and braided everything you can possibly pin and braid, Drianne. Now find me something to wear—and send someone to the High King to discover when I am to arrive."
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She dismissed Celeroviel and Selasorin at the door of the High King's pavilion. Theirs had been a courtesy escort merely, for Lord Vieliessar had sent Lord Gatriadde—Gatriadde Mangiralas, though it was his twin who had been Heir half a year past—to show her the way. When she told them they had her leave to depart, only Celeroviel looked disappointed. It was the difference between Selasorin and his elder sister; he still believed people would come and demand to tell him what he needed to know; Celeroviel liked to know things just to know them. Undoubtedly she'd be waiting in Annobeunna's pavilion after the feast was over.
Though it had been barely two candlemarks since Annobeunna had first stepped into her pavilion, the whole of the encampment was in place. She wondered with a feeling almost of dread what the morning would bring, for to strike an encampment was a longer business than to set it. Undoubtedly she would hear an entire story-cycle of complaints from Drianneredil come next sunset, and as many from her lords, who would surely be similarly plagued by their servants. But that was a trouble for tomorrow, not today.
She'd expected to find Lord Vieliessar's pavilion filled with the nobles of her court, and had welcomed it as a chance to learn more of the alliances she must make and where the threads of true power lay, but when she stepped inside, Lord Gatriadde, having delivered her, made his bow and took his leave, and she found only two places set at the table.
"Come. Sit. I do not keep great state," Lord Vieliessar said. She was dressed with shocking simplicity, in a tunic and leggings that would not have looked out of place on one of Annobeunna's stable servants, and her hair hung loose. Suddenly Annobeunna was very conscious of her silks and jewels.
"I—" she began. She hesitated, and forced herself to plunge on. Even if it was in rebellion, Keindostibaent was a rich gift, and she would hope that would matter. "Drochondeur told me you no longer have proper servants because of the Twelve, and that is not fitting. Allow me to make you a gift of him. He will serve you well."
"You are generous, Lord Annobeunna. But people are not to be given as gifts," Lord Vieliessar said quietly.
"Forgive me," Annobeunna said, bowing her head. "I meant no disrespect."
"Nor have I taken any. I know I ask much of my princes and lords komen. Many think me foolish, and say I would turn all the Fortunate Lands into the Sanctuary of the Star. I do not know that this would be such a bad thing—but my way is a new thing. And to ease your mind further, I am not entirely averse to gifts—and you have tendered me a generous one." (...)
Dear Jonathan: It took me many years, and much writing, to develop a personal style. Oddly, one of the best ways to do it is to deliberately imitate another author's style--many other authors, actually, one after the other. By paying such close attention to an author's style, and trying to duplicate it, one learns a great deal about style in general, and begins to evolve one's own.
I plot my books out in advance, first writing a short outline, then a long outline, and then breaking the book down scene by scene. However, this is more of a suggestion than a map: when the story takes off in a direction I haven't predicted, I follow it to find out where it's going.
Every writer writes differently, and the tricks and methods that work for one may not work for the next. The best thing for a beginning writer to do is try them all, and not be afraid to toss the ones that don't work for them, no matter how famous and how respected the writer is who swears by them.
Thanks for the advice. I have done some of that and have found that my writing is better for it; but it is always good to be reminded, and it is good to know that other authors have used the same techniques to improve their craft.
Dear Sue: There should be a map at the front of the hardcover of Crown of Vengeance. The scale is rather large, but it should give you an idea. If you can't find it, let me know: I may have a copy of it around here somewhere. I find maps indispensable for visualizing a story, but I am hopelessly inept when it comes to drawing them. We must all thank Tor for their yeoman efforts at translating my incoherent scribbles into something that makes a bit more sense.
While the landscape has changed a great deal between Vieliessar's time and Kellen's, you might also find it useful to know that Armethalieh was built on the site of Daroldan Great Keep.
Dear Jonathan: You are quite welcome! My esteemed co-author says there are only two rules for becoming a writer: 1. Sit down. 2. Start writing. But of course we all want, not merely to write, but to be writers that others wish to read (and are not all blessed with innate talent!) And so I go on collecting possibly-useful techniques.
Thanks for the tidbit on where Armethalieh is on the Crown of Vengeance map. I've been trying to figure that out since I first read the book a few years ago.
On a different topic, I'm really happy to hear you've finished writing Blade. I loved Crown and have been eagerly awaiting Blade since I first finished reading Crown. Is there someone we can write at Tor to let them know not to sit on the manuscript for a year before starting to work on it? :)
1. Did the "Grand Windsward" of Vieliessar's time eventually constitute at least part of the Elven Lands visited by Harrier and Tiercel? 2. Is the shrine around which the Sanctuary of the Star is built the same one that Savilla would try to use? 3. Will Sentarshadeen be built within House Caerthalien's lands? (Based on what you said about Armethalieh, I assume so.) 4. Does Kindling correspond to Groundhog Day? 5. What happened to Lady Amintia? Was she still available by the time Cilarnen returned to Armethalieh or had she been "quickly married" as Lord Volpiril said he would recommend? 6. Are the Dragon's Gate and the Gatekeeper the same pass? 7. Was Kareta hoping that she and Harrier would develop the same kind of relationship that her father and Kellen had? (Also, we know her father was Shalkan; was her mother Shalkan's lady-love Calmeren?) I hope I haven't overwhelmed you with the number of questions I have. Thanks again for this opportunity
Like Chichiri, I too would like to know if there is a way to write to Tor to "encourage" them to work on Blade of Empire sooner rather than later.
Also, should there be any significant cuts to BoE, any chance they'll end up here once the book is released? And if so, could you let us know where it had been cut so we could read it together with the rest?
It is fine, I was just curious. As much as I wish it, some things have things have to take place 'off stage' so to speak. Else some people may think the book would be to long. Don't know where they get that idea though.
Thank you for taking the time to answer, I really do appreciate it.
Hi! I'm very glad to hear Blade of Empire is on its way! My questions are: 1. What is it like to publish with another author? Do you work together or take separate passages to write and come together to edit and put them together? 2. Will there be another book in the One Dozen Daughters series? Thanks!
In Crown of Vengeance, there is the paragraph where Vielle wakes from a dream of the past. She is wondering why the High King and his queen's children would have to flee from the royal city. It's mentioned that they are considered tainted and unclean. My question has to do with that, why did the ancient elves believe Pelashia's children were tainted?
You mentioned in an earlier post that Tor planned to release a novella taking place within Crown of Vengeance are they still planning to do that? Or has the idea been Scrapped?
Once again I love this World you created and could not get enough of it.
Thank you so much! I do, too (that's one of the reasons the books are as long as they are).
I have no idea, actually. It's been a very long time since we've discussed the matter. There's a possibility that the opening of BLADE will also be published as a separate novella: it depends on how they feel about the book's length.
1. I enjoy writing with a partner because it gives me someone to talk about the story with who is also shaping the story. Usually, Ms. Lackey gives me a handful of elements, then I go off to plot it. She reads that, adds more elements, and I do the scene-by-scene breakdown, which she also reads. Then the writing starts. Sometimes she suggests a scene, and sometimes she writes one, which I drop into the manuscript in the appropriate place. I do the first draft, she tweaks it, and then it goes off to Tor. Tor has notes at that point, so it comes back to me for the revision draft, with input from Ms. Lackey.
2. There are certainly more books plotted in the "One Dozen Daughters" series, but Tor has not yet requested another one.
In the gap between the Dragon Prophecy books and the "Autumn" Trilogy (Second Endarkened War) the Elves do a lot of spreading out and building, almost entirely west of the Bazrahils. At some point, I will do another edition of the map with the locations of the Nine Cities on it.
And in answer to your other question, a letter addressed to "James Mallory's Editor" at Tor's address should reach the right person.
Not at all! I’m very fond of the world, and I enjoy answering questions about it. And with that said…
1. "Okay. You're right about that. But I don't see any Wildmages around here. Do you? So we go north, cross the Mystrals, reach Ysterialpoerin – in another couple of moonturns – don't find a Wildmage there, either – keep going – cross the Bazrahil Range, go through the Gatekeeper Pass - if we're lucky enough to manage to get there before winter sets in, cross the mountains of Pelashia's Veil, and reach the Elven Lands (…)”
So it seems to me that from what Harrier says, the Elven Lands of his time are in the Grand Windsward, though they also seem to have reclaimed Celephriandullias-Tildorangelor as well, which would make the mountains called Pelashia’s Veil the same ones that Amretheon High King knew as the Teeth of the Moon.
2. No: Savilla is using the Delfier Shrine, which was once a part of the Flower Forest Delfierarathadan near the Western Shore.
3. Yes. Elven civilization after Dragon Prophecy and before “Glories of the Autumn” is mostly concentrated in the Western Lands (though of course they maintain a presence east of the Mystrals and will be concentrating more on that area as the millennia pass).
4. More or less: it’s a festival in the early spring to celebrate the fact that the days are getting visibly longer.
5. The Lady Amintia was married to someone else. Just as well, as she was really very conventional, and Cilarnen returned to Armethalieh a very different person than he was when he left. It took him many years to find a true love, and when he did, she was not from Armethalieh at all.
6. No: the Dragon’s Gate is in the Mystrals, the Gatekeeper Pass is either in, or east of, the Bazrahils. I think it’s the one the Elves of Vieliessar’s time know as Traitor’s Gate, which would put it on the far side of the Arzhana plateau.
7. Kareta’s mother was indeed Calmeren. As for the relationship she was hoping to develop with Harrier…I would say it was heavily influenced by the fact that Shalkan’s descendents always felt a need to watch over Kellen’s descendents.
If there are significant cuts to BLADE, I will post them here if it's a matter of removing a whole chapter or something similarly long, and I can certainly tell you, in that case, where it came from. But cutting for length is often a process of removing single sentences and sometimes phrases, and then overwriting to make the cuts invisible. In that case, I'm afraid your only hope is to wait for the rights to revert and the Expanded Edition to appear.
If that's what happens, I will certainly post a list of facts that got lost in the shuffle. Fair enough?
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